Thursday, 22 November 2012

Mario's new Highwayman verses


The highwayman was dashing, dashing, dashing

In the moonlight

 At last the highwayman came to the old inn –yard

The Landlord’s daughter was waiting for the highwayman

They discussed where they will go

Tim the oestler listened

He told the king Georges men were they will find the highwayman

Right away they went to capture the highwayman

 

                                                They marched into the old inn –yard 

They smashed the door behind them

They said nothing to Bess

They tied Bess up to her bed

She saw the dark path that the Highwayman would ride

The red coats laughed out loud

The king Georges men were at every dead window

They put a pistol before her

 

Then the highwayman came riding, riding, and riding

They heard him

He saw Bess tied up, he also saw the red coats

He started shooting the red coats he shot all of them

Then he got Bess and rode away with her

By: Mario

2 comments:

  1. I like the poem because it is really very different to the original because the highwayman and Bess run away.

    I like the poem because the words we didn't understand in the poem you have made so easy to understand.

    The thing you should make better is some of the lines don't really fit together.

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  2. I like the way you call King Georges Men/soilders 'red coats' and the other ending.
    You could improve by including rhymes,similies and metaphors.

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