The
wind was a torrent of darkness upon the gusty tees,
His
pockets filled with gold and fees.
And
the highwayman came galloping, galloping, and galloping
The
highwayman came galloping, up to the old inn door…
His
gun loaded,
He
was ready,
Prepared
to make a scandal,
His
horse steady,
Prepared
to confess with the landlord’s daughter:
Bess
But
unaware,
He
was caught in Tim the Osler’s stare,
His
stare was villainous,
His
feelings were jealous,
Because
he too loved the landlord’s daughter,
So
he headed to the landlord’s quarter,
He
called over King George’s men,
And
they thoroughly inspected the massive den,
This
was the Highwayman thought was his final moments of life to spend,
And
he thought this was his end…
And
he thought it was covered with scarlet uniforms,
Under
all the cloudy storms,
The
Highwayman’s gun went banging, banging, banging
The
Highwayman’s gun went banging and spilling blood all over the floor,
They
were dead for sure,
No,
just one more,
Tim
the Osler opened the door,
He
was armed,
And
uncharmed after what he had seen,
They
agreed a showdown,
And
the Highwayman lucky with one more round,
1,
2, 3, Crash!
The
Highwayman lost,
However,
in the window Bess somehow paid the cost,
Crash!
…Her
rifle sounded,
Tim
fell to the ground, and released a horrible sound,
And
Bess later found,
That
her beloved was alright,
And
their marriage was a wonderful sight
The wind was a torrent of darkness upon the gusty trees,
His pocket filled with gold and fees…..
It is goog sebi because it has a fancy font and it is really like the actual poem of the highwayman. You could improve it by makeing up more of the poem.
ReplyDeleteYou have very good description but you could've
ReplyDeletemade it more shorter.
I loved your poem because of the wonderful rhymes,for example 'The gusty trees and gold and fees'.
ReplyDeleteI like your changes to the poem like Bess kills Tim the ostler and that Bess doesn't get killed.
I don't like that some of the rhymes are a bit weird like, all over the floor and they were dead for sure.
I like the way you made the poem long and the rhymes you used were excellent.You could improve your poem by making it more scary and a bit of mystery.But the poem was great .
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